A few years ago, while I was still in school, I spent a semester at a particular organization for one of my nursing clinicals. I really liked the type of work they did and the corporate culture but didn't bother applying there after graduation because I would not have been qualified, as they require at least 2 years experience. I now have 3 years.
Recently, I noticed that they have a job posted that I think I would be qualified for and intend to apply. I found "Mary," my old clinical instructor's name on Linked In and she is still with Organization. I'm thinking about reaching out to her. I am admittedly bad about keeping up contacts. I'm quiet by nature and though I have the best of intentions to stay in touch, I rarely do. I'm guessing it would not be out of line to contact "Mary" to ask about the position. After all, if you mind people contacting you, you don't post your name on Linked In. Am I right?
I was thinking about writing something like: Hi Mary, this is Cat. You were my clinical instructor <insert date>. I really enjoyed the time I spent at Organization and when I last checked the website, saw there was a position posted that I'm very interested in. I've been working at X, Y, and Z the past few years and I think that experience would make me a good fit for Organization. Is there anything you can tell me about Position?
Is there a better way to word this? Is there something different I should be asking? I find email difficult sometimes because you're just throwing it all out there and I feel the need for it to all be perfect. I don't want to be rude and pushy but I also don't want to be too timid and am never sure how to find that balance. If it were a face to face meeting, there would be cues to follow as the conversation progressed, but that's not possible in this context. So, lacking that, I'm turning to you all for some honest feedback- do I sound okay?